Camp Writing

CAMP DESCRIPTION

Achievement Objectives:

Purposes and audiences

• Show a developing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.
• INDICATORS:
• –  constructs texts that show a growing awareness of purpose and audience through careful choice of content, language, and text form;
• –  conveys and sustains personal voice where appropriate.

Ideas

Select, form, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.

INDICATORS:

• –  forms and expresses ideas and information with increased clarity, drawing on a range of sources;
• –  adds or changes details and comments to support ideas, showing some selectivity in the process;
• –  ideas suggest awareness of a range of dimensions or viewpoints.

Language features

Use language features appropriately, showing a developing understanding of their effects.

• INDICATORS:
• –  uses oral, written, and visual language features to create meaning and effect and engage interest;
• –  uses a range of vocabulary to communicate meaning;
• –  demonstrates good understanding of all basic spelling patterns and sounds in written English;
• –  uses an increasing range of strategies to self-monitor and self-correct spelling;
• –  writes legibly, fluently, and with ease when creating texts;
• –  uses a range of text conventions, including most grammatical conventions, appropriately and with increasing accuracy.

Structure

• Show a developing understanding of text structures.
• INDICATORS:
• –  understands that the order and organisation of words, sentences, paragraphs, and images contribute to and affect text meaning;
• –  identifies a range of text forms and recognises some of their characteristics and conventions.
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Motivation:

• Write a description about one event/experience from camp.

Key outcomes:

• To hook the reader in with an interesting beginning
• A variety of sentence starters
• A variety of sentence lengths - simple/compound/complex
• Edit and rework
• Effective peer checking and feedback

My draft and editing:

Published writing:

Have you ever been felt so petrified of a swing?No probably not, well that was what I was worded about.Trust me it is not a feeling you want to feel           


I was walking up the hill to the giant swing,I was huffing and puffing.I was so petrified because when our instructors Taco and steph told us it was about 17m high I was even more scared. My turn was after brookes and Taco harnessed me on to the swing and bar.I started going up.


The rest of my group had to pull me up with rope.I was looking happy but really wasn't inside.I was worried the they would let go but i slowly got higher and higher until I had to pull the rope.I closed my eyes as tight as I could and all I heard was a click.I felt all the cold raindrops and the wind blowing on me.I was shivering becauseI was socked because of the rain.


At the end steph took off the heavy harness and I unclipped my helmet.I was happy but I wanted another turn

My reflection and next step:

for my next step I will need t add a little bit more detail and I think I done good editing